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elven_songstress
Learned Scribe
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 Posted - 18 Apr 2005 : 20:44:16
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Writer's Note
Of course all character's other then Ardreyth belong to there respective authors. This is a work in progress as I work out her background ^_^.
It was unsettling to say the least but it was at least quieter here then it had been in her last home and the elf woman rolled onto her side to watch the small coin with it's magical enchantment light up her small room. "What am I doing here?" she had to ask herself as she glanced back to the door expecting it to open at any minute to see the shadows flicker to feel the distinct magic as she was taken away again from the only place deemed safe by Him.
He wouldn't have even concerned himself of her well being she would have just been another half breed to him had she not possessed the amulet that she wore. He said it belonged to a dear friend of his and that if only for that he would give her a job a better job then the one she had, one that would keep her busy fingers from the pockets of non marks and make sure she was at least well taken care of.
Her first instinct would have been to run.He was the head of Bregan D'Arethe and there was little a houseless rogue like herself could hope to accomplish. She lived in a crevice in the wall that had been hollowed out by her mother and her teacher,Jessalinn, the name brought memories of the surface elf to her thoughts, tall regally beautiful with her bright gold hair and her deep hazel eyes a druid by nature she had bore Ardreyth there in the Den as her mother had called it.
Ardreyth had been thirty years old when her mother had gone into the wilds shape changing as she went and the young girl had never seen her again. Leaving Ardreyth to her own defense, even her father stopped visiting her after awhile and never had she felt so alone. She knew drow were not kind, her father had not been harsh in explaining this but he had been to the point and truthful.
Then they had come,the shadowy creatures that lurked in her memory and made her sleep restless. With there shadowy forms and there glowing eyes. Drow that were Drow but not drow and Ardreyth often keep herself awake to avoid the shadowy realm in which she slipped everytime she slept or reveried.
However her day had been to long and her body was to weak from the days of surviving less then well and she found herself slipping into that darkness that awaited her.
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The place was always shadowy and the elf woman immediatly crouched down and then ducked behind the nearest column of dark stone that rose in this grey otherworld plane. Crouched down the white and gold hair slipped over her shoulders, one dusky hand rested on the longsword at her side and she waited with baited breath for something to move for her. Her heartbeat in her chest pounded painfully and as shadows spun around her there was the distinct click as her sword was loosened from its sheath, the only light in the cursed dark terrain.
Then there was a sound and the sword slipped completely free of its sheath and with a blinding accuracy dispite the fear she felt she spun to her left, the hem of her nightshirt flared out around well shaped legs of a dusky yet somehow pearlscent grey. Her battle cry died on her lips as the sword clashed with a shimmering shield and the force of her own blow numbed her hand causing her to drop it to her feet,she let out a curse in undercommon and started to tumble for her sword, until she noticed the shield belong to another elf not a shadowed creature.
"What are you doing here ?" she hissed as her hand covered the pommel of the sword triumphantly at least for the moment. The blade itself seemed to glow and alway caused drow and shadows to shield there eye from the glare and this male was no exception. Though he extended his hand and the blade yanked from her hand to land point first into the rocky ground. Effectively dulling the glare.
"What am I doing here is a very good question." answered the drow as he pushed a hand through his hair and looked around. "I am not even sure where here is or how you managed to drag me here." his tone was not arrogant as she would have expected from the dark elf she now recognized as Kimmuriel, rather he was intrigued. "Now that we have put out that awful light and I can maintain certain thought." his foot fall was quiet as it moved over to where she was and he hunched down to get a better look at her. "So your the girl that Jaraxle has been protecting, he keeps you away from the rest of us."
Ardreyth frown at the tone of voice that implied she might be a kept woman, instead she pulled her blade and rose to her feet sheathing it so the light didn't cause anymore damage to the heat sensitive eyes of her unwanted companion. Rather then focus on that she answered his questions. "What do you mean I brought you here?" with a question.
"Don't play coy with me, is this game to you I know psionic's inside and out my House" his words trailed off. He was Houseless now his mother had shown similar talents as well prehaps it was one of his abilities that had brought him here but this girl, she held something akin to him she held the spark that set her apart from other creature's and made her unique in his eyes. "How long have you possessed psionic ability?" he finally inquired as he looked around the landscape her mind had formed from countless nightmare she had been unable to escape.
"Psionics?" now it was her turn to sound less then amused at the idea of what he was saying "I am nothing more then a blade weilder and I am not a very good one of those, but what I do know has kept me alive this long." she answered as she frowned a little bit and rubbed the back of her neck,something she did when she was nervous.
"It is the powers of the mind akin to what other's call magic but also alluringly seperate." he answered as one of the things that she often saw in her dreams manifested itself to the other drow. He fell back beside her ushering her away from the creature that lashed out at them with a tentcle. "What ever this is, you made it with your mind it is not going to go away until you stand up to what ever it was you saw in the Underdark that caused this." he said.
"Why are you talking why don't you hurt it!" she demanded as she peeked around the rock facing,only to have a black slimy tendil snap past her face nicking the side of her cheek drawing a thin line of blood and leaving a stinging welt. Her fingers immediatly came up to rub away the pain.
"Because, If I implode it I will do you harm as well, and while the idea of killing doesn't bother me the idea of Jarlaxle having my skin does." he answered as he yanked her from the spot a moment before the same tendil whipped in to grab her. "Listen to me, your powers are turning in on themselves because you are using them without training without the knowledge of what you are doing, your state of mind is troubled and so is the fields of the battles you fight within it." he said as he narrowly managed to avoid another of the creatures that her brain had dreamed up.
Ardreyth stared at him not really sure what was going on only that he was telling her that she could stop these things that she had the power to do it. It was so fantastic so unreal that it might actually work. She turned around about on the drow male at her side and pulled him behind her. The tendil that wrapped around her foot faded with her will and she breathed a sigh of relief, until she glanced up and saw what her mind told her was really controlling the creature and she whimpered drawing the drow behind her closer to look over her shoulder.
Kimmuriel Oboldra saw nothing only more shadows that seemed to haunt the young woman's mind and caused her such distress. "Ardreyth.." he said softly "Remember its a figment something you dreamed up."
"No no no.." she protested weakly "It's him." she managed.
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We need to be reminded sometimes that a sunrise lasts but a few minutes,but its beauty can burnin our hearts eternally." |
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Winterfox
Senior Scribe
895 Posts |
Posted - 19 Apr 2005 : 05:52:34
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*chants* I do believe in punctuation. I do, I do.
I also believe in not confusing homonyms. Check:
- Your/you're
- Too/to
- Frowned/frown
- There/their
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elven_songstress
Learned Scribe
126 Posts |
Posted - 19 Apr 2005 : 21:10:22
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Sorry English is not my first language.
Thanks for being snarky :P |
We need to be reminded sometimes that a sunrise lasts but a few minutes,but its beauty can burnin our hearts eternally." |
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SiriusBlack
Great Reader
USA
5517 Posts |
Posted - 19 Apr 2005 : 21:22:15
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Originally posted by elven_songstress
Sorry English is not my first language.
Thanks for being snarky :P
For what it's worth, your writing here is better than most of the writing I have seen from graduate level students. Thus, for it not being your first language, your English skills seem damn fine. |
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Rhezarnos
Learned Scribe
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Malaysia
131 Posts |
Posted - 20 Apr 2005 : 01:44:43
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quote:
Originally posted by elven_songstress
Sorry English is not my first language.
Thanks for being snarky :P
Your english ain't bad...you haven't seen me writing yet. Could kill a grammar teacher if she read it. |
Playing a winged dwarf with acrophobia is fun. |
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Winterfox
Senior Scribe
895 Posts |
Posted - 20 Apr 2005 : 02:39:25
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quote:
Originally posted by elven_songstress
Sorry English is not my first language.
Thanks for being snarky :P
You're welcome.
And after all, you're in good company -- English isn't my first language, either. =p |
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elven_songstress
Learned Scribe
126 Posts |
Posted - 20 Apr 2005 : 19:22:34
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You NEED to be an editor. *lol*
What is your first language? |
We need to be reminded sometimes that a sunrise lasts but a few minutes,but its beauty can burnin our hearts eternally." |
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Winterfox
Senior Scribe
895 Posts |
Posted - 22 Apr 2005 : 01:18:34
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Originally posted by elven_songstress
You NEED to be an editor. *lol*
Eh, not really. I hardly even tore your post apart, line by line.
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What is your first language?
Thai. |
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elven_songstress
Learned Scribe
126 Posts |
Posted - 25 Apr 2005 : 12:22:10
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A Language I don't speak mine is French.
I didn't mean that thing about being an Editor as an insult. ^_~ hope it wasn't taken as such. |
We need to be reminded sometimes that a sunrise lasts but a few minutes,but its beauty can burnin our hearts eternally." |
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Lord Desolation
Acolyte
USA
27 Posts |
Posted - 24 May 2005 : 22:12:33
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| That was a good story not the best I have ever read but good. You should really work on your writing stile though. |
"That is not dead which can eternal lie, and with strange aeons even death may die." |
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Asgetrion
Master of Realmslore
Finland
1564 Posts |
Posted - 24 May 2005 : 22:52:25
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I liked the story  It didnīt matter that english isnīt your native language (neither it is mine)- it appealed to me. The content was written quite well, and minor grammatical errors donīt matter that much. Keep up the good work! |
"What am I doing today? Ask me tomorrow - I can be sure of giving you the right answer then."
-- Askarran of Selgaunt, Master Sage, speaking to a curious merchant, Year of the Helm |
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